I agree. Improvements needed to be made, and I'm happy with the changes, and I'm glad you are too.
Juggling the different parts of Byakuya wasn't as hard as I thought it'd be, prob. because he seems (deliciously) divided anyway -- to me at least.
I'm glad you liked the towel part as that was actually the only issue I had with this chapter, I wasn't sure if it came across ok, or interrupted pacing and just ... I don't know, but I didn't feel positive about it. Relieved now.
As to Renji, I felt that he needed to be fleshed out more (to give the story more depth and I owe it to him really :D) so I am trying to get inside his head (or any part of his body really -- I'm not fussed :P).
I'm trying to respond intelligently but I can't stop recalling your 'balls comment' which is making coherency hard.
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Re: There's something perverse about a cat lusting after a man but...
Date: 2008-08-14 11:12 pm (UTC)Juggling the different parts of Byakuya wasn't as hard as I thought it'd be, prob. because he seems (deliciously) divided anyway -- to me at least.
I'm glad you liked the towel part as that was actually the only issue I had with this chapter, I wasn't sure if it came across ok, or interrupted pacing and just ... I don't know, but I didn't feel positive about it. Relieved now.
As to Renji, I felt that he needed to be fleshed out more (to give the story more depth and I owe it to him really :D) so I am trying to get inside his head (or any part of his body really -- I'm not fussed :P).
I'm trying to respond intelligently but I can't stop recalling your 'balls comment' which is making coherency hard.
Thanks for all the lovely things you had to say.